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    Rift Disciple Insubstantial's Avatar
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    Default Jharyn's Journal - Clerical Musings and Verse

    "What can be done against such hate?"
    We ask ourselves as rough tides break
    on rocky shores that once were clean
    beaches upon which our children walked.

    "The cultists came..." became the start
    of every sorrowful tale. And all withdrew
    with broken hearts, from their lands,
    their plains, their forests, their vales.

    All butchered, dead, defiled, and gone,
    our lives that once were full and pure.
    The dragons and their followers, a plague
    to which there is no cure.

    And so we suffer.
    And so we break.
    Under swirling rifts.
    Thunder cracks and lightning snakes,
    As we all hang our heads.

    But hope to those who's faith is true
    As Vigil's Might is proved. "To Sanctum come!"
    The vengeful cry of those who wish to stand.

    To stem the tide of death and pain, brought
    to us through planar tears. Harken all ye
    Guardians! Behold your shining Ascended
    There!

    They rise, brought back from death's cold
    grip, they rise with steel and hardened eyes.
    They rise for all Telara's sake, to smite the
    terrors from the skies.

    So harken all ye Guardians.

    Behold your faith proved true.

    Ascended march from Sanctum now.

    They march for all.

    They march for you.

    Do not despair at open rifts.
    Do not succumb to doubt.
    Do not turn your face away.
    Steel yourselves instead and shout!

    "Behold the evils, turned to rout!
    Behold the Vigil's Ascended come!
    Behold them all ye Guardians!
    Hold onto faith and never run!"

    And through it all, though times seem bleak
    Do not give in to dark despair.
    For with their steel and hardened eyes
    The Ascended, for all Telara are there.

    So harken all ye Guardians.

    Behold your faith proved true.

    Ascended march from Sanctum now.

    They march for all.

    They march for you.
    Last edited by Insubstantial; 06-03-2011 at 05:47 AM.
    Jharyn - Cleric - Druishamsticar! / Inquisicabanel!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Insubstantial View Post
    They rise, brought back from death's cold
    grip, they rise with steel and hardened eyes.
    They rise for all Telara's sake, to smite the
    terrors from the skies.
    I really liked the entire poem, but I think this part was my favorite. It provides really good imagery!

    The meter of the poem as a whole could use a bit of work. You start off with iambs, but after the second stanza they break down a bit. I'm terrible at writing poetry though. This is much better than I could ever hope to do, and I really did enjoy it a lot.

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    Bravo! Very well written, excellent job! Much more beautiful than anything I could write.



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